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Feeding Time
Dante, our dog, is a challenge to feed
He is always certain
every meal will be his last
It’s a race against drool,
best avoided by the squeamish
The trick is to get the food down
before he realizes it's feeding time
One day it will be his last meal
and it will break my heart
I know I’ll miss those times
I've stepped in the puddles of anticipation
from that damn dog
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
A bit of silliness for today, but pet owners will understand, LOL!
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Thu, 2021-01-21 11:53
I most certainly do...
understand! Never have had a dog like that, but do know that they have many quirks and differences like most humans do.
[I have known people like that]. I knew a fellow employee that would have eaten his hamburger and fries and be half done with his milkshake before I could find a place to park in the lot of the burger-joint! I never understood the how or why of it.
The only thing that I would change is: I would make the word [I] [I've] stepped... It sort of gives an additional emphasis to the past. Good stuff, ~ Geezer.
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Michael Anthony
Thu, 2021-01-21 12:04
Thanks geez! I completely
Thanks Geez! I completely agree with your edit suggestion, and have updated the piece - thank you!
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Michael Anthony
scribbler
Thu, 2021-01-21 22:15
the
most expensive thing about a dog is the emotional price of losing him/her