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Beach Day

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Sun, 2024-08-25 12:46

"That look, right there!",
I point at her and accuse,
as I catch her smile before it fades.

With no further words between us
we walked down to the azure coast,
as I imagined shells on the beach,
and second cups of coffee before lunch.

Review Request (Direction):

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoet Weekly 08/25/24 to 08/31/24

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rula

Sun, 2024-08-25 15:16

Hello Anthony

This is awesome capture of some romantic moments and the seeking for deeper connection! I'm left eager to know more.

P.s.I thought maybe this belongs more to the "Beach Day" contest?

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Michael Anthony

Sun, 2024-08-25 16:16

Thanks Rula! I am always

Thanks Rula! I am always fascinated with poetry's ability to capture moments that seem so fleeting. I wasn't aware of that contest - oh well.

Best

Michael Anthony

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Lavender

Mon, 2024-08-26 16:18

Hello, Michael,
A lovely reflection on something endearing that must have been spoken about before, is now happening in the moment, while looking forward to what delightful things are going to happen next. Enjoying and appreciating one another's company. Lovely.
Thank you!
L

Michael Anthony

Tue, 2024-08-27 10:10

Exactly L! Could not have

Exactly L! Could not have explained this piece better - glad you liked it.

Best

Michael Anthony

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