The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

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This poem titled "Walls" attempts to capture a sense of despair and loneliness through the metaphor of faded wallpaper and ghosts. The speaker seems to be trapped in a cycle of empty years, seeking meaning but unable to find it. The use of nodding sleepy eyes and daylight approaching adds a sense of weariness and hopelessness to the poem.

However, the language in the poem is awkward and lacks flow. The use of "with with" in the first line is redundant and jarring. The line "which tirelessly count" feels incomplete and unclear. The use of "enabling ear" at the end of the poem feels forced and out of place.

One suggested line edit would be to change "which tirelessly count" to "counting tirelessly," which would improve the flow and clarity of the line.

Overall, "Walls" has potential in its concept but falls short in its execution. With some revision to the language and structure, it could be a stronger piece.

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some minor changes in the structure of some lines,
to make them more readable?

Like this:

The hallways are covered
with faded wallpaper
that counts all the
frail, and empty years

Nodding, sleepy eyes
and daylight approaching
seeking meaning
that just won't reappear

Lost or forgotten
all these moments
trying to escape from the ghosts
in my ears

Telling me I've nothing
left to offer
dying in vain
for an enabling ear!

~ Geezer.
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