Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.


The sleeping souls of trees the castle
woods and wise guards of natures
below the one track mind of
Squirrels and skittering hopping Jays

The earthy scent drifting towards

the nostrils. my dots and brown spools
look up to the splashed, washed
coats of Dragon fruit, watermelon red

and Atlantic hues married by the
shimmering disc spearing its arms of

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.


The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Under the Influence of Nature" captures the essence of the natural world and its impact on the speaker. Here are a few suggestions to enhance the overall effectiveness of the poem:

1. Consider adding punctuation: The poem lacks punctuation, which can make it challenging for readers to follow the flow and meaning of the lines. Incorporating appropriate punctuation marks, such as commas and periods, will help create a clearer structure and improve readability.

2. Develop the imagery: While the poem introduces various elements of nature, such as trees, squirrels, jays, and the sky, it would benefit from further elaboration and sensory details. Try to paint a more vivid picture by describing the specific characteristics, colors, and movements of these elements. This will enable readers to better visualize and connect with the natural world you are portraying.

3. Strengthen the metaphors: The poem briefly mentions "the sleeping souls of trees" and "wise guards of nature's thickets," which are intriguing metaphors.

Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to

One gets from being out in nature. I love your use of senses and colors to make everything come to life. Your structure has gotten so much better. I am sure this is a work in progress but I like this draft.


Yes I'm learning to order my chaos lol

author comment

Really like the way this flows. You could choose two ways to write this: go for the traditional style and punctuate properly, give line spaces correctly, and make it a bit easier for the reader to follow. Or let it flow without caution, keep the enjambment and let the intoxicating influence of nature glide the reader through all the poem's sensations. I really like the latter because this is very much the feeling I get from nature, but I think most people would prefer the more traditional form.
"...splashed, washed sky" and "...Atlantic hues married by the golden shimmering disc." Poetic language. Lovely.
Thank you!
I believe "it's" in the final line should be "its."

I appreciate the your subjective comment . I might look into further

author comment

you must be as weary of hearing my objections to punctuation around here
as many others are, but it seems to me that if you don't use it, or use it improperly, it doesn't project the right tempo
or the pauses that the piece needs. Of course, only you know exactly how you mean the lines or the way you breathe them,
but here is how I believe that this should read.

A comma between [trees, the castle] and a comma after castle.
Comma after [below,] lower case [squirrels]. Commas in between [skittering, hopping jays.
Capitalize [My] dots and brown spools.

Capitalize [Look] and period after sky.
close up the gaps between all the lines and make one paragraph.

As always, use my comments and advice, twist them to your liking, or just trash them. ~ Geez.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

My fuckn keyboard loves caps shit ! Thank you i agree it's the auto text

author comment
(c) No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.