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Twins

Two were born that day
Had the very same image
And the same blood type

Having the same DNA
Personalities differ
Choices not alike

Each had their own goals
Choosing different life paths
Still viewed as alike

Buying same loved things
Often having the same dreams
Without knowing it

Although different
Twins inwardly share like thoughts
But not like actions

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Twins" presents an exploration of the paradoxical nature of twins, who are identical in physicality but often divergent in personality and life choices. The use of simple, direct language effectively conveys this concept to the reader.

The structure of the poem, which appears to be a series of haiku, provides a clear and concise framework for the ideas being explored. However, the syllable count in some of the lines deviates from the traditional 5-7-5 haiku structure. For example, "Choosing different life paths" contains six syllables, not seven. To maintain the integrity of the haiku form, consider revising these lines to adhere to the syllable count.

The poem could benefit from the use of more concrete imagery. While the abstract concepts of shared DNA and divergent life choices are interesting, the poem might have a stronger impact if these ideas were grounded in specific, tangible details. For example, instead of "Choosing different life paths", you might say something like "One chose books, the other, the open sea".

The final two lines, "Twins inwardly share like thoughts / But not like actions", effectively encapsulate the main theme of the poem. However, the word "like" is used twice in quick succession, which can be a bit jarring. Consider revising for variety in word choice.

Overall, the poem presents a compelling exploration of the nature of twins, but could be strengthened with adherence to the traditional haiku form and the inclusion of more concrete imagery.

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