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The truth about the emptiness.
Scream.
Cry, cry cry.
Dear, Mr. Faust.
Where did You hide your emotions ?
Underneath the bed ?
Let me put the light on Your broken table.
Emotions, are a really nasty,
complications.
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Geezer
Tue, 2022-08-23 22:06
Hmmmm...
There is a truth about the emptiness, and it is that most people need to fill it.
It seems that the longer one resists, the louder you must scream in the end.
I love the statement, that emotions are a really nasty complication. [delete the [ess].
No matter that the emotion might be of joy or something else, once you have an emotion, you have to do something with it.
This poem was a thoughtful provocation. ~ Geezer.
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