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Secret Little Life
Your life, a coincidence of the future, and You let it go.
Only know, I could fly if I let it be.
Then I would never let it go.
Only know I've been high, when I could think, forward. Past. To present.
But I,
let it go.
I see.
You saw an angel in a gray cloth.
It, told You, that We all can be. In harmony.
But.
What about.
Fall, Rise, and The Pain.
The Pain that makes us human.
If, only this angel could speak.
I would never let the shadows clang their fists.
Break my will.
Mix and Match, with my kind.
I would never, let shadows be.
To be.
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Sat, 2024-02-10 21:10
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