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On the other side of the glass.

On the other side of the glass, fireflies speak in elvish.
Cíÿ lě - means, I love You.

I love You.

Elves are afraid of the touch.
They are small, and human could hurt them.
We are too big for them. Which can be crucial.

Too big the human, small elves say.

Too big are You.

I wish, just that we could understand them better.
Be not, just.




We can be good,
they are just scared.

I am sorry.

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First line, you have the comma in the wrong place for the intent
you should have it include [glass] but leave the fireflies to speak elvish.

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