The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, titled "Transient Blossom," explores the fleeting nature of beauty and happiness. The speaker acknowledges that these qualities are not necessarily linked, and that true beauty lies beyond the physical decay of the body. The poem then delves into the speaker's own experience of aging, with the physical changes that come with it. However, the speaker ultimately takes a positive outlook, recognizing the value of a life well-lived and the importance of being oneself.

One suggested line edit would be to change "carcass" to a less harsh word, as it may detract from the overall message of the poem. For example, "vessel" or "shell" could be used instead.

Overall, this poem effectively conveys the message that beauty and happiness are fleeting, but that true value lies beyond the physical realm. The personal experience of aging adds depth and authenticity to the poem, and the positive outlook at the end is a refreshing and uplifting conclusion.

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Pretty tight rhythms here. Subject matter is affirmative and very accessible to the average reader. I’m really impressed with this poem. You e certainly done your best here and I believe that is true about your day to day living. Self awareness coupled with willingness to change is a super power.

Tim

Great poem, I enjoyed the meter and the rhythm and almost sang it, ha ha. Nice imagery too, I loved the blossom on a tree, line. Ruby :)