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Happy Hoodie
I bought a happy hoodie
With colours bright and bold
It was a treat a proper goodie
Now that time has made me old
I normally hide behind the black
And shy from luminosity
But I fear there is no going back
The whole world has become adversity
This simple garment made me smile
I guess I have found another chance
To lift my soul and all the while
Wear a Jacobs coat whilst I dance
Too many dark days have I seen
Too many of my peers suffer
So forgive me please if I do deem
This bright coat my mental buffer
It's true the world is dark today
It's hard to find a light
Hold on it's going to be ok
Look at my hoodie, it is very bright
By Leanne Hogton
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-05-27 04:58
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Overall, "Happy Hoodie" is a well-crafted poem that effectively captures the transformative power of a simple garment. The use of bright and bold colors in contrast to the speaker's usual preference for black is a powerful symbol of hope and renewal. The poem's message of finding joy and comfort in small things is a relatable and uplifting one.
One potential area for improvement is the use of the word "atrocity" in line 8. While it effectively conveys the speaker's despair, it feels a bit too heavy-handed and out of place in a poem that is otherwise focused on positivity. A possible alternative could be "adversity" or "darkness", which would still convey the same sense of struggle without the jarring effect of the word "atrocity".
Overall, "Happy Hoodie" is a strong and inspiring poem that reminds readers to seek out joy and light even in the darkest of times.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-05-27 09:42
I love this
The simplest thing can bring us joy in dark times and give us the push we need to keep going. Sometimes we need reminders of better times and what a better way than a brightly colored, comfortable hoodie! Good job!
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Sat, 2023-05-27 10:24
I will echo...
RoseBlack's comments, and say that this is a good piece! I love that you've gotten yourself a brightly colored hoodie!
It reminds me of the days when my children were small and we bought them the brightest, most colorful jackets, so that we could keep track of them in places like the stores and on the playgrounds. How their faces would light up, and their mood
changed when they put them on! Great piece! ~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-05-27 10:32
Brightly colored hoodies
are still Kote's favorite! Brightly colored anything seems to bring such joy! This poem made me smile.
~RoseBlack~
Tigger Kaz
Sun, 2023-05-28 09:31
Excellent poem
The simple things that add light to an ever darkening world.
Thank you for sharing this uplifting poem.
Leanne Hogton
Sun, 2023-05-28 19:34
Thank you
Cheers
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