The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

In "A Tale for a Winter's Eve," the poem tells a story of a mysterious encounter on a cold winter night. Here are some suggestions for improvement and points to consider:

1. Consistency in dialect: The poem uses a specific dialect and colloquial language throughout, which adds to its charm and authenticity. However, there are a few instances where the dialect seems to be inconsistent, such as "I takes 'is word as gospel" and "I 'ammers on the bar till landlord comes." It would be beneficial to ensure that the dialect remains consistent throughout the poem to maintain its unique voice.

2. Punctuation and capitalization: The poem has some inconsistencies in punctuation and capitalization. For example, some lines begin with a capital letter, while others do not. Additionally, some lines have punctuation at the end, while others do not. Ensuring consistency in punctuation and capitalization will improve the overall readability of the poem.

3. Imagery and description: The poem contains vivid imagery, such as "the snow falls 'ard and the drifts grow deep" and "the winds 'owled ever more fearful." However, there are opportunities to further enhance the imagery and create a more immersive experience for the reader. For example, the description of the stranger and the nurse could be expanded upon to provide a clearer picture of their appearance and demeanor.

4. Structure and rhythm: The poem's structure is relatively consistent, with four-line stanzas and a mostly regular rhyme scheme. However, the rhythm varies throughout the poem, which can be disorienting for the reader. Consider refining the rhythm and meter to create a more consistent and engaging flow.

5. Clarity and narrative: The poem tells an intriguing story, but there are moments where the narrative becomes unclear or confusing. For example, the connection between the stranger and the nurse, as well as their relationship to the speaker, could be clarified. Additionally, the ending of the poem leaves the reader with questions about the significance of the events and the speaker's role in the story. Providing more context or explanation may help to create a more satisfying narrative arc.

Overall, the poem has a unique voice and an engaging story. By addressing the points mentioned above, the poem can be further refined and improved.

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A vernacular piece (the type of which is close to my heart)
that will age like wine the more you refine it,

Great tale, Alex. !!
Don't aim fer the gallery,,, shoot fer the Gods.

Obi.

I can't wait to see what becomes of this. This has a very Lewis Carroll feel..the language reminds me of Jabberwocky. Well done.

...and I'm glad to see you'll work on it. If you're taking suggestions, I have a couple for S8.

"I turn, gone,why God didn't 'e stay?"
becomes
"I turn, he's gone, why God din't 'e stay."

Changing didn't to din't will help the meter there.Adding "he's" is more direct. (sic. e's)

"As 'e staggered out into the night"
becomes
"As 'e's sucked by 'is 'eels by the blight"

...just a little more colour there, I think.

4 stanzas later, you repeat "night". If you change it to "moon" (or colloquial equivalent) it might open another opportunity to finish L4 with a different rhyme sound.

I enjoyed reading so far, being a subject sort of new and the "yarny" spin on it.

Good luck! I should think Obi would be a great help also.

Thomas