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Clerihew Number 2 - King Charles 1.
King Charles the first
Was considered the worst
So they cut off his head
Till he was dead.
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neopoet
Wed, 2024-02-21 00:31
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem follows the structure of a Clerihew, a humorous, four-line biographical poem invented by Edmund Clerihew Bentley. The first line typically ends with a person's name, and the rhyme scheme is AABB, both of which this poem adheres to.
However, the Clerihew form also relies on humor and whimsy, which could be further developed in this poem. The events referenced are historically accurate, but they are presented in a straightforward manner that lacks the unexpected or absurd twists that often characterize this form of poetry.
Additionally, the last two lines could benefit from more varied language. The phrase "till he was dead" is somewhat redundant, as the previous line already conveys that King Charles I was executed. A more unexpected or humorous detail about King Charles I's life or reign could make this poem more engaging and true to the Clerihew form.
Lastly, the rhythm of the poem could be improved. Clerihews often have an irregular meter, but the rhythm should still flow naturally when the poem is read aloud. In this case, the second line is much shorter than the first, which disrupts the rhythm. Adding a few more syllables to the second line could improve the poem's flow.
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Obadiah Grey
Wed, 2024-02-21 12:28
Well. that's my first snigger
Well. that's my first snigger of the day mate.
cheers m'dears !
Obi.
Alex Tanner
Wed, 2024-02-21 16:01
Glad to
Glad to oblige Obi. Alex
RoseBlack
Fri, 2024-02-23 07:51
Mic drop
Just like that...he was dead! I love the short and sweet of this poem. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Alex Tanner
Fri, 2024-02-23 09:16
Hello Rose.
Hello Rose and thank you. got lots of silly ideas for these. They are fun to scribble down when the brain is dead. Alex