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Sunday Morning (Describe a Sunday Morning Contest)

I open my windows to let the cool breeze flow through.
My walls are bathing in the sun.
I sit at the table with hot tea in my favorite cup.

The kids are playing and giggling
as I sit and soak in the joy.

It’s my perfect Sunday morning...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

In analyzing this poem, several elements stand out that could be further developed or refined for greater impact.

1. Imagery: The poem does a good job of using sensory imagery to create a vivid picture of a Sunday morning. However, the imagery could be more specific and detailed to further immerse the reader in the scene. For instance, instead of simply stating "the kids are playing and giggling," the poet could describe what games they are playing, what their laughter sounds like, or how their joy contributes to the atmosphere of the morning.

2. Structure: The poem currently lacks a consistent rhythm or rhyme scheme. While free verse is a valid poetic form, the poet might consider experimenting with more structured forms to add another layer of interest to the poem. Alternatively, if the poet wishes to stick with free verse, they could focus on making their line breaks more purposeful and impactful.

3. Theme: The poem's theme of finding peace and joy in a simple Sunday morning is clear and relatable. However, the poet could delve deeper into this theme by exploring why this particular morning is so perfect, or what it represents in the grand scheme of the speaker's life. This could add a level of depth and complexity to the poem.

4. Language: The language used in the poem is straightforward and easy to understand, which can be an asset in creating a clear, accessible poem. However, the poet might consider incorporating more figurative language or unique word choices to make the poem more memorable and engaging.

5. Tone: The tone of the poem is calm and content, effectively conveying the speaker's feelings about their Sunday morning. The poet could further enhance this tone by using more sensory details and evocative language to fully immerse the reader in the speaker's experience.

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Hello, Kristen,
I am relaxed and content just reading this. Lovely. I hope many more of your Sundays are like this!
L

Thanks a lot, Lavender! I appreciate the feedback and I hope I have many more like this too! Much love!

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xxx

A lovely, simple poem, just catching those sweet moments, the moments you just want to keep.
Thank you!

Jenifer Jaspa James

Thanks, Jenifer!

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Like a peaceful Sunday morning....great job.

~RoseBlack~

Thanks, RoseBlack! :)

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