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Shiver
shiver and show me
how cold I can be
between these shoulders I keep
all this pain that I see
belongs to ghosts
who may look like me
the wreckage they wrought
you harbor for free
i am not ghosts
they are not me
i am at best
a glorious test
growing unrest
the fire in your breast
parity's victory
may feel sublime
but scales left tipped
topple in time
i am the finger in your fruit
the mole in your mind
i am the death of a myth
your devil quite kind
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Geezer
Sun, 2023-02-19 21:20
Reminds me...
of when we were kids, "Not me!" "It wasn't me." ~ Geezer.
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Indivisible_Origin
Thu, 2023-02-23 14:23
thanks
I love to hear the varied recollections and reminiscences my work helps coax to the forefront. Thank you for reading,
IO
author commentIndivisible_Origin
Thu, 2023-02-23 14:25
hallmark
I suppose that's a good thing to have in one's style. I do defer to the gravity of the emotion in the way the words sit beside each other far before I consider the form and any rigidity it might to seek to impose on my stream of consciousness :) Thank you so much,
IO
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-02-20 12:55
It has an unknowable quality to it
One will never be able to define the writing of Indivisible Origin. Every word questions the very meaning of existence and leaves me deeply curious every single time. Sometimes I can’t put any meaning to them at all, I just read the language and it creates an aesthetic common to all his works.
I’m speaking like he won’t read this. Lol
Tim
Indivisible_Origin
Thu, 2023-02-23 14:28
I read it
The aesthetic my friend, I am proud and happy to lend, the meaning...well that takes two. You make the other half of that in the reading. I just don't want you in the same spot as when you started. That's my job. Like narratives and music, if a poem does not move its audience, it fails.
IO
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