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Perdition

Submitted by Indivisible_Origin on Fri, 2023-03-31 13:11

You are the gait poetry takes when it wants a fight.
Unbidden onset. Fleet and feral.
You are atrocities uncovered, cast in archaic forge.
You are the mirror eyed beast in every night.
Taut jawed. Slick faced. Razor toothed.
You are screams without sound in a slow motion dream.
You are virulent and merciless in vein.
You are waking bathed in painful perdition.
You are the blood I beat. The sweat I drink.
You are it.
All.
Every.
And done.

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-03-31 14:18

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of many scenarios to fit this piece, I will not try to assign a theme. Do I see a typo? Maybe with how you see the [gait]?
As an entrance, or as a pace to measure the action? ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Fri, 2023-03-31 17:16

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This feels like a very strong inner conflict.
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