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Self Examination

Submitted by Clentin on Fri, 2023-01-13 14:08

We, like mushrooms of the
Field, develop strong fiber
With the light of dawn
Fortified by hopeful rays
Of the new day’s sun
Staunch enough to endure
The biting of teeth chewing
At its tender stem
Yet too fragile to bear
The weight of night’s awesome
Boot.

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-01-24 13:12

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very interesting. I would like to read more.

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Clentin

Wed, 2023-01-25 10:03

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Thank you.
I am trying to write more. I hope to create some more poems.

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Clentin

Wed, 2023-01-25 10:06

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I think that with age one looks over the past while anticipating the future. Hoping to improve as time moves on.

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-01-25 14:51

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i think that is a very good outlook on things. good luck,

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