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Self Examination

Submitted by Clentin on Fri, 2023-01-13 14:08

We, like mushrooms of the
Field, develop strong fiber
With the light of dawn
Fortified by hopeful rays
Of the new day’s sun
Staunch enough to endure
The biting of teeth chewing
At its tender stem
Yet too fragile to bear
The weight of night’s awesome
Boot.

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Jackweb

Fri, 2023-01-13 15:07

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Nothing more to say than to give kudos to this awesome piece. Woven with creative beauty. Your profound imagery heightened the energy of the poem. I really like the brevity.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Clentin

Fri, 2023-01-13 15:33

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Thank you for your comment, greatly appreciated.
Any and all comments are welcome.
Still trying to write after a good many years

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Clentin

Fri, 2023-01-13 15:33

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Thank you for your comment, greatly appreciated.
Any and all comments are welcome.
Still trying to write after a good many years

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Lavender

Fri, 2023-01-13 19:57

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Hello, Clentin,
A lovely simile. I can follow it closely all the way until the final intriguing line. What is the weight of night's awesome boot?
Thank you,
L

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