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Roses

Roses in springtime fill the air
With fragrances behind compare

Red, white, yellow and more
Their perfume penetrates my core

Their leaves are firm and green
Creating a lovely scene

The flowers are so sweet
Their aroma can't be beat

Even though their thorns are there
They serve to protect and care

No matter what the rose
It's the flower everyone knows

A precious gift for all occasions
The rose is here for generations

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Roses" presents a clear and consistent theme throughout, focusing on the beauty and significance of roses. However, there are a few areas that could benefit from further refinement.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from a more varied and complex vocabulary. For example, the words "smell" and "aroma" are used interchangeably to describe the scent of the roses. Using more descriptive language could enhance the sensory experience for the reader.

Secondly, the line "Their petals are firm and green" seems inconsistent with the general understanding of roses. Typically, rose petals are soft and come in a variety of colors, but not usually green. This might cause confusion for the reader.

Thirdly, the rhythm of the poem could be improved. While most of the poem follows a simple AABB rhyme scheme, there are a few lines that do not adhere to this pattern, such as "No matter what the rose/It's the flower everyone knows". Adjusting these lines to fit the established rhythm could enhance the overall flow of the poem.

Lastly, the poem could delve deeper into the symbolism of roses. While the poem does touch on this with the line "A precious gift for all occasions", exploring this further could add depth and complexity to the piece.

Overall, the poem has a strong central theme and a clear message, but could benefit from more descriptive language, consistent imagery, a steady rhythm, and a deeper exploration of symbolism.

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Beautiful roses - spring/summertime essence! "Their smell penetrates my core." I like that line. (Maybe use "perfume" in place of "smell" for a little alliteration?) Lovely poem!
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