this perfectly, as my good friend died recently. My window where I work at my computer faces the side of his house, and I look at it every day. Some days I have to shut my blinds, so that I can't see it anymore and others, I need to look. A great poem that helps to ease the pain. I wouldn't change a thing. ~ Geezer.
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It could be made into a very tight poem and I’d enjoy that however I do rather enjoy what you have here as it is. There are a few lines I find cumbersome but I like the meaning of what you wrote a lot. I leave it to you if you wanna play around with it. Try and think about where you want me to pause as a reader and put the line breaks there. Which I think you done to my satisfaction for most of them already.

I like the ideas this poem conveys
Tim

Hello, Clentin,
Along with your title, your final four lines can stand alone as a brief but meaningful poem. Strong sentiment.
L

Are precious and those like you describe are cherished. I often feel the presence of a lost loved one and it brings such comfort. Good job.