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Regarding Mister Toad

Regarding Mister Toad,
he’s burdened with a heavy load.
His belly’s round and fat.
He knows just where the bugs are at.
Serve em’ up, dead or alive.
He doesn't care about all that.
They're right there for the pickin.
To him they’re all just finger lickin.
And when he hops along back home.
He’ll hunker down in the muddy ground
and dream of things forlorn and lonely.
Content to sleep with worms and bones.

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I just love toads. I hope you enjoy.
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Regarding Mister Toad" demonstrates a clear understanding of rhythm and rhyme, which helps to create a playful tone that suits the subject matter. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter to enhance its musicality. For instance, the line "His belly’s round and fat" has fewer syllables than the other lines, which disrupts the rhythm.

The poem also effectively uses imagery to create a vivid picture of the toad and its environment. The lines "He’ll hunker down in the muddy ground" and "Content to sleep with worms and bones" are particularly evocative, suggesting both the physical reality of the toad's habitat and a sense of his satisfaction with his life.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent point of view. The use of the third person in most of the poem creates a sense of distance between the reader and the toad, but the line "To him they’re all just finger lickin" seems to shift into the toad's perspective, which can be confusing.

Lastly, the poem could explore its themes more deeply. The toad's indifference to whether the bugs he eats are "dead or alive" and his dreams of "things forlorn and lonely" suggest interesting themes of survival and solitude, but these are not fully developed. The poem could delve more into these aspects to add depth and complexity.

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I remember Mr Toad, Ratty, Moley and Badger! Mr. Toad was always going off on wonderful adventures and getting into trouble. I also remember Toad Hall. you have captured one of Mr. Toads sides.

*hugs and happy holidays, Cat

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So glad you enjoyed this. I just love toads. Happy holidays.

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So glad you enjoyed this. I just love toads. Happy holidays.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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So glad you enjoyed this. I just love toads. Happy holidays.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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Of one of my favorite childhood stories, The Wind in the Willows. I have not thought of that one in a while but Mr
Toad was a favorite character. I see Cat has echoed a similar thought. Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Thank you so very much and I hope you have a wondrous holiday.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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Thank you so very much and I hope you have a wondrous holiday.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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a little bit ragged in meter, but I enjoyed the little tale of Mister Toad. I was impressed with the use of near-rhyme in [home and bones]. ~ Geez.
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Sorry if I don't understand, but is meter like beat
or rythym of a song? Thanks for reading.

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meter is the beat of syllables in a rhyming poem. ~ Geez.
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Thanks for the instruction! I appreciate it.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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Thanks for the instruction! I appreciate it.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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