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Reflection

Submitted by Clentin on Tue, 2023-02-28 07:56

Looking back allows me
To listen more closely
And appreciate more fully

I find that old memories
Show me a different set of parents
than I knew

I clearly see now
My siblings in a new light
Different from the past

I realize
A lot of love and caring
That I missed

Looking back allows me
To listen more closely
And appreciate more fully

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Editing - rough draft
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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-28 08:11

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this a couple of times, before I understood the third stanza. I'm not sure of how you might make it clearer, or even if you should try. I'm of a mind that it helps to go back and read it again, anyway. I have many memories of the days of my childhood and find that the older I get, the more I realize, that beyond the simple memory, are nuances that you see only after you are grown and have children of your own. Well done, ~ Geezer.
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Clentin

Tue, 2023-02-28 08:22

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Thank you. I also was trying to review the third stanza, i will take another look.
Thanks

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-03-01 08:22

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A very true piece of work. As we get older, and develop more grown-up attitudes, we begin to understand that our parents were looking out for us, and weren't just being mean, and our siblings were having their own changes. Nice work and I think
that the changes that you made definitely make it clearer. ~ Geezer.
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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-28 08:33

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Exceeds those memories?

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Clentin

Tue, 2023-02-28 12:19

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I did edit the poem, maybe better?

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-28 20:47

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Hello, Clentin,
Perfect title for this poem - makes me reflect on my past, too, with a deeper sense of appreciation.
Thank you!
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Is this a certain poetry form where the first and last stanzas are the same?

Clentin

Tue, 2023-02-28 20:50

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Thanks for reading and comment.

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-03-01 07:49

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Certainly does make us see things differently as we age and experience the ups and downs of life. Well done!

~RoseBlack~

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