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Party's Over - 1988

I lit another cigarette,
As I watched you enter the room,
Handing your fur coat over to the host,
Who ran his hand through his dark hair,
Clearly stunned by your beauty,
Your midnight blue dress,
Hugged the feminine curves of your body,
Causing my heart to race,
As I looked away for a moment,
Composing myself,
I didn't want to believe it,
I didn't want this to happen,
But I was falling madly in love with you,
A love that could never be,
So as I struggled with my feelings,
And made my way towards you,
I hardened my stare,
And grabbed your wrist roughly,
Which pained me more than you,
As I peered into those shocked and gorgeous eyes,
My heart weeping at my fate,
As I uttered the words,
"You're under arrest."

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content


I like a poem that tells as story, goes somewhere, very enjoyable reading several times. Alex


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what a twist! Held closely until the very end; it took me by surprise! Never expected or detected until the moment of reveal.
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Thanks :)

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Completely took me by surprise. Excellent language skills as well. Superb story telling.


Thx so much!!

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Thank you!!

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excellent! the moment of shock hits a bullseye!

*hugs, Cat

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