The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Once a Witch" exhibits a clear narrative progression and a consistent rhyme scheme, which contributes to its overall readability. The use of vivid imagery and metaphors, particularly in the depiction of the witch and her sisters, adds depth and intrigue to the narrative.

However, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its themes. The depiction of men as easily bewitched and women as manipulative sorceresses risks reinforcing gender stereotypes. A more complex portrayal of these characters could add depth to the poem and challenge readers' expectations.

The rhythm of the poem is occasionally disrupted by lines that are significantly longer or shorter than others. Maintaining a more consistent meter throughout the poem could enhance its musicality and flow.

Lastly, the poem's language is generally clear and accessible, but there are moments where the wording could be refined for clarity. For example, the phrase "this woman tastes his mirth" is somewhat ambiguous and could be reworded for better comprehension.

Overall, the poem demonstrates a strong understanding of narrative and poetic structure, but could benefit from a deeper exploration of its themes, more consistent meter, and clearer language.

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Yup,
Count me in !!!
No need to bugger about with spells.

Always knew women were in charge.

yers, appreciatively, Obi.

I will say it again,'Tenses' mean something! Do not be afraid to add [esses, ed or anything to denote the proper time stamp]!

I think that in order to stay proper with "But [we]... it should be [we've noticed], there is only a soft syllable, which makes little difference.
Commas at :[My sisters[,] they're real beauties, I have to tell a secret[,] stir the pot[,] seduce a man[,] man forever[,]
Change: I [ate] to eat... Watch those tenses!
Add a syllable to: my [cold] dead breast.

This is good stuff! I like the darkness and the theme of witches. ~ Geez.
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my pleasure. ~ Geez.
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Interesting storytelling. Nice inclusion of the witch imagery from old popular literature. Excellent rhythm structure and rhyme.

Tim

in this cool adaptation to the mysterious "witch" that has been the bane of men for centuries. The mermaid blip was a neat twist also.
Just a suggestion to clean up the metre in the last line, just by changing two words

"I’ll satisfy you only once, with my fruitless and cold breast"
becomes...
I’ll satisfy you only once, with my cold and fruitless breast
You could take it a step further also by dropping the the word "my"
becomes...
I’ll satisfy you only once, with cold and fruitless breast!

Cheers! It's a good one!

Thomas

Hello, Ruby,
I can feel the fun you had with this! Enjoyed reading! It carries along in a fast, smooth rhythm and rhyme. I like the change on the final line. It wraps up the entire poem in a cold, witchlike fashion.
Thank you!
L

It's true. You've changed your appearance once again!
Question is...are you a good witch...or a bad witch?

I see you're also stepping up your metre. Looking good!

Thomas