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The poem "Catch the Next Train" effectively uses the metaphor of a train journey to explore themes of travel, introspection, and the passage of time. The use of sensory language and imagery is commendable, as it helps to create a vivid picture of the journey and the changing landscapes.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. In some lines, the rhythm is disrupted due to extra syllables or a shift in stress patterns. For instance, in the line "Amongst passenger’s journey bound upon this ride," the rhythm is somewhat disrupted. Consider revising for smoother flow.

The poem could also benefit from a more focused exploration of its themes. Currently, the themes of travel, introspection, and time are somewhat muddled together. By focusing more clearly on one theme or by more clearly delineating the shifts between themes, the poem could gain greater depth and coherence.

Lastly, the poem could use more show than tell. For example, instead of stating "I gape in humble gratitude, as I become relaxed," show the reader how the speaker becomes relaxed. This could be done through describing physical sensations, thoughts, or actions. This would make the emotional journey of the speaker more engaging for the reader.

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In this line:

I want to stop at the station, hop (on) a train departing,
this word is not really necessary, unless you are going for syllable count. The word "judders" is new to me and quite descriptive. I will have to remember it ;) I like your title and rhyming pattern. Your language usage is quite stimulating. My favorite lines are:

I clamber down the steps onto a platform of eerie silence,
And consider the next step on route to ease my mind.
For we travel to the future giving easily our compliance,
As every step we take leaves our past, distant and behind.

especially the last two lines!

*hugs, Cat

Think of the train scene in White Christmas and when they get off in Vermont...all the scenery...no snow...just a destination of parts unknown. Well done.

...so much to pick at in this poem from a Canadian english raised point of view. I'm not sure of the enunciation differences in the english you use here, but I can't imagine it can be so different, so here goes...
The metre is the first thing that struck me, seeming haphazard, but I can't say you are looking for perfect metre in a critique...but, I will say the line I like best metrically is
"I’ll stare and soak in scenery, the sounds of stop and starting" which is sing-songy. I struggle to find consistency throughout the poem, basically.
S2,L2 is a nice line, too, but would be better written
"And every signal highlights new locations on the side" and has steady metre also.

Lastly, I might have started the poem with
"l'm stopping at the station, to hop a train departing" which is neutrally metrical. The comma acts like the hinge of a see-saw.

Let that be a start, if you will, and I'll wait for more direction if you want further opinion.

Thomas

This could be describing the mind's journey to sleep as it rambles through past events and other images present themselves, with the final destination being peaceful dreaming and the awakening in the morning. It may not be what was intended, but that is where this train took me. I really liked it.

My favorite verse is:

As time slows, it takes me, far from strife and worries,
And I look to where I’ve been, owning each event.
The train continues onwards, the horn blares, it hurries,
Until the ride stops and leads to my final descent.

Hello, Ruby,
I like this journey - I read it as a search for one's self and solitude. I'm a little lost in the meaning of S2, L4. Is the narrator speaking reflectively of self? I paused there a bit to fully understand. Also, I wonder about the word "eerie" in the final stanza. The next line feels almost like a sigh of relief. Maybe the silence is more welcoming than the negative connotations eerie usually describes? So sorry if I may be off the mark of your meaning. I find it to be a very thought provoking poem. I'll be back to read again after your response.
Thank you, Ruby!
L

I understand now! Thank you for explaining!
L