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Old Age

Old age can be a blessing in disguise
For the lessons it brings, can't be denied

It's often seen as a time of decline
But the benefits of old age can still shine

Experience and wisdom are a pair
Old age gives thoughts to share

The path of life is worn but true
We can follow it, if we choose to

We take out time to look at life’s flares
Offering our time and prayers

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The poem "Old Age" attempts to shed light on the positive aspects of aging, a topic often associated with decline and loss. This perspective is refreshing and could resonate with many readers. However, there are several areas where the poem could be improved.

1. Consistency in Rhyme Scheme: The poem starts with an AABB rhyme scheme in the first two stanzas, but this pattern is not maintained in the third and fourth stanzas. This inconsistency can disrupt the flow of the poem and confuse the reader. It would be beneficial to maintain a consistent rhyme scheme throughout the poem.

2. Depth of Imagery: While the poem does touch on the benefits of old age, it could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. For instance, instead of saying "Experience and wisdom are a pair", the poem could provide a concrete example of how experience and wisdom manifest in old age.

3. Clarity in Message: The line "We take out time to look at life’s flares" is a bit ambiguous. It's not clear what "life's flares" refer to. Is it moments of crisis, moments of joy, or something else? Clarifying this could strengthen the overall message of the poem.

4. Use of Clichés: The phrase "a blessing in disguise" is a common cliché. While clichés can sometimes be effective, they often lack originality and can make a poem feel less unique. Consider replacing this and other clichés with more original expressions.

5. Punctuation: The poem lacks punctuation which can make it difficult for the reader to understand the intended pauses and emphasis in the poem. Adding appropriate punctuation can improve the readability of the poem.

6. Meter: The poem lacks a consistent meter, which can make it feel disjointed. Consider revising the poem to have a consistent number of syllables per line. This can create a more rhythmic and pleasing flow to the poem.

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too bad not everyone sees it that way. I'm sure that even in the Native American tribes, that were modeled on elders having the most power because of wisdom; that were those young-buck upstarts that thought the old ways were lost, and outdated.
Wisdom is two faced, it cannot not be bought without experience, yet it doesn't automatically come with it either. We have to learn from our mistakes. Keep writing. ~ Geez.

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Hello, Clentin,
Many benefits, indeed! Wise words!

Thank you for reading and comments. Old age brings to mind so many things, so many good things!

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