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Offerings.

Give my Lady bangles
Give ribbons for her hair.
Give her rings with precious stones
To grace her fingers fair.
Give her a cape of satin
With ermine lined about
Clothe her like the goddess
That she is,
Oh! Never doubt.

Should you see my Lady
Kiss her hand for me
You shall know her if you see her,
For there is none like she.
Eyes as black as Raven’s Wing
Hair like a furnace glow
Lips that smile and sparkle
On all who walk below.

You may not see my lady
For she says not where she be
But if you should then tell her
I wait by a lonely sea
With only waves around me
Crashing on eternal shores
With only Gulls for company
That cry, and swoop, and soar.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

That’s your title.

Beautiful
Tim

Perfect, why didn't I think of that? I'll change it now. Thanks Tim. Alex

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This never missed a beat all the way through! Excellent rhyme and pace! Beautiful thoughts. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

The title is thanks to Tim. When he suggested it I was so cross I hadn't considered it myself. Thanks for your comments, I always try to get rhyme into my writing. I like poetry, regardless of the subject, that swings along and catches one up. I may be wrong (I frequently am) but to me it seems there is so much interesting and powerful work here that comes across as very bland because it just makes a statement without getting to the soul of the subject. Alex.

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I love everything about this! The language, the flow, the rhythm...it's wonderful! Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Thank you Rose. Alex

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