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My Twin

A buddy since life’sfirst day
Walking, talking, laughing out loud
Actions once taken for granted

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "My Twin," presents a succinct narrative about a close friendship that has evolved into a brotherly bond. The simplicity of the language and the brevity of the poem allow for a clear and direct communication of the theme. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

1. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. Instead of general actions like "walking, talking, laughing out loud," consider using specific shared experiences or unique habits that could give the reader a deeper understanding of the bond between the two characters.

2. Emotional Depth: While the poem conveys a sense of camaraderie, it could further explore the emotional depth of the relationship. What makes this bond akin to a brotherly one? What trials or triumphs have they shared? Adding these elements could provide more emotional resonance.

3. Structure and Rhythm: The poem lacks a consistent rhythm or meter, which can make the reading experience less engaging. Consider revising the structure to create a more rhythmic flow.

4. Title: The title, "My Twin," suggests a biological relationship, which seems to contradict the narrative of a friendship evolving into a brotherly bond. If the intention is to express that the bond is as close as that of twins, this could be made clearer in the body of the poem.

In conclusion, while the poem effectively communicates a theme of friendship and brotherhood, it could benefit from more specific imagery, deeper emotional exploration, a consistent rhythm, and a more fitting title.

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Hello, Clentin,
How fun that you are a twin! (I think you've written about him before, correct? I don't think the AI grasped that completely.) Is this an American cinquain? There are many variants and not all hold the 2,4,6,8,2 syllable count within the five lines. I do have a suggestion in case anyone else might possibly be confused that you are an actual twin - instead of the bond starting with school, perhaps start at birth somehow. My apologies for the suggestion if this is a poem about a strong friendship with a classmate.
A fun poem.
Thank you,

Thank you for your suggestion. You are right the start of life is where it all began!

author comment

that first BREATH together. An amazing split-second to share.

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