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My Tat Tits

Submitted by Ruby Lord on Mon, 2023-06-12 08:39

My tattoos, bitter and mild
Never able to feed a child
Older now with veins of blue
You won’t find beer in the tit tattoo

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Mon, 2023-06-12 14:40

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Geezer

Mon, 2023-06-12 10:41

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of some women that I know. I am/was a biker and my wife has tattoos. We are all older now, and the tattoos that we all have are spread out, and I see them as they have gone from early twenties, to now in the late fifties and sixties. Yep, I recognize them from your description, LoL ~ Geez.
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Tue, 2023-06-13 11:49

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Thanks Geez, sadly, I don't have any tattoos, yet. Ruby :)

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-06-14 13:39

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IF... the right one comes along, it will be the right one! As Obi says, Au natural is very becoming in its own right. My wife didn't get her first one until about fifteen years ago, and we have been together almost forty years! Now, she has three! [I have nine
not including cover-ups of crude tats]. It is interesting that you still entertain the idea of getting one. ~ Geez.
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Seren

Tue, 2023-06-13 08:37

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I was a biker and biker's wife once upon a time, yet I have never found that tattoo that I felt was ME, I think this is a brilliant I absolutely love this one. All my girls have tats and have pestered me for years to get one and I have always said I will, but it will be the right one for me. I'm a picky bitch.

I too see your tats.

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Ruby Lord

Tue, 2023-06-13 11:47

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Hi Seren, thank you for your comments and for reading my poem. Ruby :) xx

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Obadiah Grey

Tue, 2023-06-13 13:11

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I'm still a biker!
and can categorically state here and now!!
There ain't no tattoo that exists that
that enhances a wondrous woman's tits!!!
Though, I'm willing to be proven wrong,
just send some pics, n I'll smoke yer bong!!!

I think this is perhaps deeper and more personal than my flippant comment addresses.

Obi.

Seren

Wed, 2023-06-14 00:20

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I am so jealous, I wish I could still ride I miss it so much!!

hugs to you both

Seren/Jayne

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Ruby Lord

Tue, 2023-06-13 14:09

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Oooppps, sorry Obi, me tits are too big for the camera :)

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