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MAMMY
Black tarmac road, winter night, the full moon follows me.
Mammy, look, look at the moon Mammy, do you see?
My arm tucked into hers, defended from invading sibling,
On her other side, a baby brother, twelve months beyond a yearling.
The marathon walk to the church, we sit in refrigeration
Packed together inside to wait, with a shivering congregation.
On her knees, praying, with words I didn’t understand.
But all through the service, I’d hold her arm with my demanding hand.
Mammy’s lips her words moving but she never spoke the prayers aloud.
Spiritually in her faith did she speak to God above the crowd?
As if she knew what I was thinking, she lowered her face to meet my eye.
Say your prayers and don’t be cheating, God is watching from on high.
My head is lowered, hands together, mumbling words I had not grasped,
It’s a comfort to relive that scene, she’s in my heart, hands together clasped.
Mammy look to the moon, please see me, and tell me where you are?
If I could hold you in moon light, we wouldn’t seem so far.
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-05-22 11:06
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Geezer
Tue, 2023-05-23 00:11
I don't see...
anything that I would change. Your title expresses a child's name for mother and I am always intrigued by the names that children call their mothers. Your language use is good, not overly dramatic and easy to read; nothing to have to figure out.
I feel the rhyme is good and the pace is even. The theme is one that is easily relatable, and it flowed well from beginning to end. Nicely done! ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
Ruby Lord
Tue, 2023-05-23 05:47
Thank you for your kind
Thank you for your kind comments Geezer, much appreciated.
My mum was Irish, it's pretty normal in ireland to call your mother mammy or mam. Ruby :)
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-05-23 07:41
dear Ruby,
this poem would make great song lyrics! I enjoyed it very much, thank you for this.
*always Cat, *hugs
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Ruby Lord
Tue, 2023-05-23 08:50
Thank you Cat. Now you said
Thank you Cat. Now you said it I sung it ha ha. Take care & stay safe Ruby :) xx
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Ruby Lord
Wed, 2023-05-31 04:37
Thank you so much, what a
Thank you so much, what a surprise it was this morning to receive the message. I'm made up, Ruby :)
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Alex Tanner
Wed, 2023-05-31 05:16
Mammy
A very well deserved win. Alex
Ruby Lord
Wed, 2023-05-31 05:32
Thank you Alex, I am very
Thank you Alex, I am very happy. It means so much to me, to have my poem win a prize, omg, I am made up. Ruby :)
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