great rhythm
I love the opening lines

but just a couple of suggestions
‘Twisting, turning and making me blind’ (I’d lose the ‘and’ – put a comma after ‘turning - just to cut down on one of the many 'and's there’)

‘Eating my conscious again and again’ - do you mean ‘conscious’ ? or ‘consciousness’ or ‘conscience’
‘conscious’ seems odd to me – but it may just be me …

‘ This constance of evil thats brewing within’ - ‘constance’ – not a word (constancy of evil will work)
also that’s should be that’s – with an apostrophe..

and good rhyme
one spot
'When will this lift or simply suspend,
This constance of evil thats brewing within'
try something like?
'When will this lift, suspension begin
This constance of evil thats brewing within?'

I like the theme of this write
I think it could be developed further
love judy
xxx

ps - i'd suggest you edit the title for the moment, stating the workshop - more chance of people involved seeing it...