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Little bit of magic

Whenever the sun rises up on the horizon, I look towards the window ill. To see her oval face.
Because even the angels, sometimes lose the wings. Just to

Feel sometimes,

more like at home.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem, "Little bit of magic." I appreciate the imagery you've created with the rising sun and the window. However, I would like to offer some feedback to help strengthen your poem.

First, consider refining your language and imagery to make it more vivid and evocative. For example, instead of saying "I look towards the window ill," you could explore more descriptive language to convey the emotions or sensations you experience when looking at the window.

Additionally, the line "Because even the angels, sometimes lose the wings" seems to introduce a metaphor or comparison, but it is not fully developed or explored in the poem. Consider expanding on this idea and connecting it more closely to the theme or message of the poem.

Finally, the last line, "Feel sometimes, more like at home," feels incomplete. It would be helpful to provide more context or detail to help readers understand what it means to feel "more like at home" and how it relates to the rest of

Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to

that you have a typo in the first line.
I look towards the window [s]ill.
Your form is a little strange; I'm not sure if it is intentional, but it certainly is distracting.
~ Geezer.

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