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Just to find a line!

Struggling just to find the words
to convey in a simple line
do I know too much or lack the wisdom
to even write it down!
frustration and an aching head
are all I seem to find
it seems as though the wrongs and rights
have caught me in a bind
passing judgment on myself
I walk a narrow line
the workings of the universe say
the consequence is mine
will I live to write another day
or just be left behind!
my brain says yes, my heart says no
you then must decide!

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Just to find a line!" captures the struggle of a writer trying to put their thoughts into words. The use of simple language and straightforward phrasing allows the reader to easily identify with the speaker's frustration. The repetition of the word "line" throughout the poem emphasizes the importance of finding the right words to accurately convey a message.

However, the poem could benefit from some more detailed descriptions or imagery to engage the reader further. Additionally, the last two lines of the poem feel disconnected from the rest of the piece and could be reworked to better fit the overall theme.

One suggested line edit could be in the third line, changing "do I know" to "do I lack." This would give the line a clearer parallel structure and emphasize the speaker's self-doubt.

Overall, "Just to find a line!" effectively captures the struggle of writing and the pressure to find the right words. With some added imagery and a stronger conclusion, the poem could be even more impactful.

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to find the lines, is a common occurrence with poets and authors of all kinds of writing. You will find your way. If you look
around, you will find that many of us have so-called dry spells or loss of contact with our muse. Sometimes, as people that have just started writing or writing in a new place, we are fired up and write prolifically. Then, we taper off and find ourselves
writing about the same old things and in the same old ways. We get in a rut. I have been writing poetry for a long time, and
occasionally find that I lose the will to write, or that I cannot find something that charges me up. Try to go into new realms
think outside the box. Find things that interest you and write about them. This is a good start! ~ Geezer.
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Right now I don't know how to comment, but thanks for reading and leaving
something good to think about!

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Successively until our languages become one!

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just comment! What I did was to comment. We like critique and in commenting, we often critique without realizing. By saying I liked this because... you are comment /critiquing. Maybe low-level critique, but all the same, critique! Unless you are a high-level English-Major of some kind, no one comes here and jumps into big-time critique. But... We love commenting! Give it a try! LoL ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks Geez don't like critiquing anyway.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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