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Insomnia - A Haiku

Didn’t sleep again.
My alarm rings in minutes.
Maybe tomorrow.

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This haiku adheres to the traditional 5-7-5 syllable count, which is commendable. The theme of insomnia is clearly communicated through the three lines, and the use of the phrase "Maybe tomorrow" at the end effectively conveys a sense of hope and resignation.

However, the poem could benefit from the use of more evocative language. Haikus, despite their brevity, are known for their ability to paint vivid pictures or evoke strong emotions. The first line, "Didn’t sleep again," while clear, could be more impactful if it hinted at the reasons for the insomnia or the feelings associated with it.

The second line, "My alarm rings in minutes," is a good use of anticipation and time, but it could be more effective if it were more descriptive or metaphorical.

The final line, "Maybe tomorrow," while it effectively communicates the poet's hope for sleep in the future, could be more powerful if it were more specific or if it tied back to the theme of insomnia in a more direct or surprising way.

In summary, while this haiku meets the structural requirements and communicates its theme effectively, it could benefit from the use of more evocative and descriptive language.

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