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Inertia

Submitted by Indivisible_Origin on Thu, 2023-02-23 20:44

Inertia is motion when you've got it
Not stillness when you want it
Gravity reinvents mercy
For those who find
Their plummet needs no push
And those who know
you can never fall to slow
Exquisite anguish is rooted in this
Words that barely pass for static
Once fueled a woman who stood
Stealing rays from the sun
Weathered stands a man
Living in light barely creeping
Through the shutters and the glass

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Editing - polished draft
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Seren

Fri, 2023-02-24 04:46

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This one's reflective of many things many kinds of experiences in life, I really liked this one, those end lines are superb, I do have one suggestion but if you don't agree with it that's fine it's just a suggestion.

you can never fall to slow(ly)

just a thought?

kind Regards Seren

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Candlewitch

Fri, 2023-02-24 06:35

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I love this line:
you can never fall to slow

*hugs, Cat

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