The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Inclement weather!" effectively uses vivid imagery to create a sense of tension and impending doom. The use of words such as "long black train," "thunder roars," and "sky grows black" contribute to a dark and ominous atmosphere. However, the poem could benefit from more consistent rhythm and rhyme to enhance its musicality and flow.

In terms of structure, the poem could benefit from more uniformity. The lines vary in length and rhythm, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. Consider revising to create a more consistent meter, which can help to create a more immersive reading experience.

The poem could also benefit from more use of figurative language. While the imagery is strong, the use of metaphors, similes, or personification could add depth and complexity to the poem. For instance, comparing the train to something else could add another layer of meaning.

Lastly, the final line, "All that’s left, the aftermath!" is a powerful conclusion, but it could be more impactful if the aftermath was described in more detail. Instead of telling the reader about the aftermath, show it through vivid and evocative imagery. This could provide a stronger ending and leave a lasting impression on the reader.

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this piece says a lot about the weather out in the Midwest. At first, I thought that you were going to rhyme all the way through.
The rapidity of the change from a structured rhyming piece to the description of the chaos, with the short lines, makes me remember a thunderstorm I rode through on a motorcycle. It came on just like a freight-train, almost a tornado. Good work, it felt smooth even without rhyming. ~ Geez.
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I live in the Midwest. you captured the feel of a tornado well and the sounds! I was stuck home alone at age 16. a few windows got broken by tree branches. The sound of breaking glass scared me silly! not nice experience.

*hugs, Cat

This is great, I felt the speed and the force in your words.
We don't have tornadoes in the uk but heck, we have more rain than we know what to do with and currently, it is getting much worse. Here's to a wet christmas. Ruby :) xx