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Flesh Over Bones

I am only flesh over bones

Trying my best to get along

Gets harder every day I try

Each day another part of me dies

The pain I feel always exceeds

The love I want, the love I need

Each night more and more tears fall

I find it hard to answer mornings call

I try to exist in the world I live in

A life I find hard each day to defend

My will is weak, my strength gone

I am only flesh over bones

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Title: Flesh Over Bones

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Thank you for sharing your poem, "Flesh Over Bones." It explores themes of struggle, emotional pain, and the fragility of existence. The repetition of the line "I am only flesh over bones" creates a sense of vulnerability and emphasizes the speaker's feelings of being overwhelmed.

The poem effectively conveys a sense of despair and the weight of daily hardships. The line "Each day another part of me dies" captures the gradual erosion of the speaker's spirit. The contrast between the pain felt and the love desired adds depth to the emotional landscape of the poem.

The use of imagery, such as tears falling at night and finding it hard to answer morning's call, adds a visual element to the poem and enhances the reader's understanding of the speaker's emotional state.

To further strengthen your poem, consider exploring the reasons behind the speaker's struggles. This could provide additional context and depth to the emotions expressed. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying

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but what bones they are! Lovely bones, that fill the skin of you with such a wonderful persona. I truly feel that there are people in this world who would feel terrible without your presence. Maybe you should write a book about the way you feel, have you wondered if there are others that feel like you do? What would you say to them, how would you convince them to go on?
It is there inside you, I know it. The flesh over bones line really got me! I have felt that very same feeling many times. I don't see anything I would change, not one thing! ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geezer. I have written several books of poetry and short stories.

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