The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Fishing" is a concise piece that captures the essence of a fishing experience. However, there are areas where it could be improved to create a more engaging and immersive experience for the reader.

1. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more vivid imagery. The line "As the fish run and play" is a good start, but it could be expanded upon. For example, describing the appearance or behavior of the fish, or the environment around the fisherman, could add depth to the poem.

2. Rhythm and Meter: The poem doesn't seem to follow a consistent rhythm or meter. While free verse is a valid poetic form, even free verse often has some rhythmic elements to guide the reader's experience. Experimenting with the rhythm could make the poem more engaging.

3. Show, Don't Tell: The final line, "Success", tells the reader directly that the fisherman was successful. This could be shown more subtly, for example by describing the feeling of the tug on the line, or the sight of a fish being reeled in.

4. Theme and Message: The poem could delve deeper into the theme of fishing. Is there a particular message or feeling the poet wants to convey about fishing? This could be explored more thoroughly in the poem.

5. Word Choice: The choice of words could be more varied and descriptive. For example, instead of "big catch", the poet could use more specific language to describe the fish or the act of catching it.

These suggestions are intended to help improve the poem's depth and reader engagement. However, the final decision on any changes rests with the poet, who should consider their own vision and style when revising their work.

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Hello, Clentin,
I really like this Cinquain. I noticed the 3rd and 4th lines have pretty much the same intention. It seems the clever 4th line leads up to "success." Maybe switch the 3rd line up to give a hint on "how" you are fishing - type of bait, method? Something hands on to add to the action of fishing, along with "hoping."
Thank you!
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I was about to suggest something, but you got the answer before I could get it out. ~ Geez.
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