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Enough

Submitted by Kristen H. on Mon, 2024-01-08 20:00

And if all the love I ever feel
is the love between you and I,
that is enough...

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoet weekly 01/07/24 to 01/13/24

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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neopoet

Tue, 2024-01-09 02:00

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Title: Enough

Poem Text:
And if all the love I ever feel
is the love between you and I,
that is enough...

Review:

Thank you for sharing your poem, "Enough." The brevity of your poem captures a sentiment of contentment and fulfillment in a concise manner. However, I would like to offer some suggestions to further enhance the impact of your poem.

1. Consider exploring more vivid imagery: While the simplicity of your poem can be effective, incorporating vivid imagery can help to create a stronger emotional connection with the reader. Try to paint a picture with your words by using descriptive language that appeals to the senses.

2. Experiment with different poetic devices: Your poem relies primarily on straightforward language and a simple structure. To add depth and complexity, consider experimenting with poetic devices such as metaphors, similes, or personification. These devices can enrich your poem and add layers of meaning.

3. Expand on the theme: While your poem touches on the idea that

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2024-01-09 08:18

Dear Kristen,

Do not believe all the crap that AI tells you about adding more vivid imagery. It usually tells me to add meter (to a free verse poem??? you do not need to add anything to this superb poem. But you need to remove the word (and) as it is unnecessary

If all the love I ever feel
is the love between you and I,
that is enough...

it reads better without (and)

I know what you mean as I have been with the love of my life for 42 years! This is a great poem, I wish I had written it!

*hugs, Cat

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Kristen H.

Wed, 2024-01-10 09:35

Thank you...

so much, Candlewitch! Oddly enough, while I know the "and" is unnecessary, I quite like it there. It's difficult to explain why, but it makes sense in my head. I usually just use the AI for reference for how to improve my poems in the future, not so much as a critique on current ones.

author comment

Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-01-10 11:11

It is...

your poem and you know best how you want it to read. my advice is only that...You can take it or leave it as you wish! It is a strongly written poem. I like it very much. Always go with your gut feeling!

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Kristen H.

Wed, 2024-01-10 14:03