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Ebb and Flow
I saw you today
and I felt sad.
Sad because of what we lost.
Sad because I miss being yours.
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I saw you today
and I felt nothing
I think it's safe to say,
I'm over you...
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I saw you today
and I was so angry
Angry that we don't have
what we could've had...
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I saw you today
and I felt relieved
Relieved that we
are not together
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I saw you today
and I felt happy
Happy to see you
Alive and well
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I saw you today
and I saw
that you were sad
to see me.
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Day after day
I see you in these halls
and every day I feel something new.
It's crazy to think
One month ago today
We kissed
You told me "don't go"
You begged me to stay.
You asked me why
Now here we are,
Strangers at best
With nothing but memories in our wake.
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Sun, 2024-02-04 02:00
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Leslie
Sun, 2024-02-04 04:52
Kristen H.
Very nice but sad I feel your emotions. I'm sorry anybody has to experience this.
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Kristen H.
Sun, 2024-02-04 08:26
Thank you...
Leslie! While it is rather sad some days, human emotions can be unpredictable. Some days are much easier than others.
author commentCandlewitch
Sun, 2024-02-04 05:53
Dear Kristen,
you have once again done it... these emotions that are relevant to the stages of parting with love. my favorite lines are:
Day after day
I see you in these halls
and every day I feel something new.
excellent work!
*hugs, Cat
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Kristen H.
Sun, 2024-02-04 08:28
Thank you...
very much, Candlewitch! Sometimes it's hard to put into words these feelings, but you have to get it out before you get stuck.
author commentMermaidMaster
Sun, 2024-02-04 13:28
wonderfully done! I love the
wonderfully done! I love the way you repeat i saw you today it really shows how dynamic the emotions can be when you’re missing someone. I’m so sorry you’ve had to experience this, it’s always so hard to grow distant with someone who used to be close. Beautiful poem, thanks for sharing!
-MM
<3
Kristen H.
Sun, 2024-02-04 13:33
Thank you...
very much, MM! I wrote this poem over the course of 2 weeks. Each time I say "I saw you today", it was a new day.
I appreciate your kind words and feedback!
author commentMermaidMaster
Sun, 2024-02-04 13:29
wonderfully done! I love the
wonderfully done! I love the way you repeat i saw you today it really shows how dynamic the emotions can be when you’re missing someone. I’m so sorry you’ve had to experience this, it’s always so hard to grow distant with someone who used to be close. Beautiful poem, thanks for sharing!
-MM
<3