The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dreaming" effectively uses a narrative style to engage the reader in a suspenseful situation. The use of rhyme and rhythm is consistent, which contributes to the overall flow of the poem. However, the poem could benefit from a more varied vocabulary to enhance the imagery and emotional impact.

The poem's narrative is clear, but the use of clichéd phrases such as "place of fright" and "drunken freak" may detract from the intended suspense and horror. Instead, consider using more descriptive language to paint a vivid picture of the scene and characters.

The poem also employs a twist ending, revealing that the events were part of a dream. This is a common trope in storytelling, but it can sometimes feel like a cop-out if not handled carefully. Consider adding more hints or foreshadowing earlier in the poem to make the revelation feel more earned and less abrupt.

In terms of structure, the poem maintains a consistent AABB rhyme scheme, which helps to create a steady rhythm. However, some lines are noticeably longer than others, which can disrupt the flow. Try to maintain a consistent meter throughout the poem to improve its musicality.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structures. Many lines begin with "I", which can become repetitive. Experimenting with different sentence structures can make the poem more engaging and dynamic.

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Great read, a clever poem into the nightmares of the night!

My only uncertainty was that, as the poem mostly uses the past tense, the line:

'Knowing that today’s the day'

- startled me a little. Maybe using quotation marks would help, as though you had thought it, that awful feeling of 'today's the day'?

Anyway, I really enjoyed it, and glad my nightmares aren't quite that bad!

Thank you

Jenifer

A good horror poem with interesting and engaging rhythm descriptive. Simple and easy to understand.
Good imagery and creativity writing style. I like how it started out with an introduction of personal descriptive then there is a twist at the end of a nightmare story telling.