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Dream Nasty

When I dream, I dream of you

About the things I want us to do

Whenever we lay in our bed

These are the things in my head

I want us to fly on ecstasy wings

Where we can enjoy the nasty things

We would go too far away lands

Roam to wild places with our hands

Kiss with an unmatched passion

Make love like it was going out of fashion

We would extend the night into the day

Our imagination would have its way

When the sun in all of its majesty rose

We would have done things nobody knows

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I like this! It brings much to the imagination. Although I think that there is nothing much new under the sun, I get the idea of doing things that most people wouldn't think of. I was wondering, is the spelling of [too] deliberate, in the line: "We would go too far away lands."? Or just a Freudian slip? Nothing to critique otherwise. ~ Geezer.

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Thanks Geezer. I used Grammarly and that was its suggestion.

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Frolicking, 'eh?! YOLO!
Thanks for this one!

You are welcome. I am glad you enjoyed it.

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I’d suggest that change Geezer was talking about. “To” not “too”.

I think this one hits the mark for me. I’m really super lucky in love. The wife and myself have ups and downs but we stay focused on working on our relationship every day and let’s face it, that includes sexual intimacy. It’s something we both value and put a lot of energy and thoughtfulness into the pursuit of it. Kids make it difficult and sometimes we swing and miss. We’re tired or kids get sick or whatever. I wish everyone enjoyed a relationship like ours. I know both of us harbor pretty much every sentiment you’ve captured here when we are both longing for each other.

May you find this person and find them again and again,

Thanks Tim. I wish you both the best.

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leaves the mind to wonder/wander! Get creative and do all the things no one else would think of! I second what Tim has said and hope you find that person over and over again,


Thanks Rose for the comment.

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