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A Date With Freddy Krueger
I'm going on a date with Freddy Krueger
Dreams have never been so scary
I'm not sure what to expect
But I know it won't be merry
A visit to Freddy's boiler room
A night so full of dread
I'm sure there's no escaping
Whatever he has in his head
He'll take me on a twisted journey
Through a world of morbid dreams
The things I'll see, I can't imagine
It's much more than it seems
My heart is beating fast
My body trembling and weak
But I know I must go through this
If I ever want to get through the week
I look for ways to get protection
I see his fingers that are knives
And move to shield myself
Wondering how many have lost their lives
So here I am on a date with Freddy Krueger
I'm ready for whatever comes my way
I'm sure it won't be an easy night
But I'll do whatever it takes to get away
Comments
Ruby Lord
Mon, 2023-10-09 05:33
I liked your ending, it
I liked your ending, it caught me by surprise. It's a good poem, and a good read. The only point I picked up on was a word repeated in two lines:
He'll take me on a twisted journey
Through a world of twisted dreams
Perhaps the repetition of the word twisted so close in the sentences can be improved by a different word? Wretched, morbid, traumatic, dreams? Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Clentin
Mon, 2023-10-09 07:29
You are right. I edited using
You are right. I edited using morbid in the second line. I like your suggestion.
Thank you very much