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Daily Thoughts

We wake up each and every day
Seeking various games to play
What we really find
Are thoughts within our mind
Still seeking real games to play

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The poem "Daily Thoughts" demonstrates a clear understanding of the concept of internal struggle and the human condition. The use of simple language and everyday imagery makes the poem accessible and relatable to a wide audience.

However, there are areas that could be improved to enhance the overall impact of the poem. The rhythm of the poem is slightly inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For instance, the second line, "Seeking various games to play," has one syllable more than the first line. This discrepancy can be resolved by revising the line to maintain the same number of syllables as the first line.

The poem could also benefit from the use of more vivid and specific imagery. While the idea of "games" is a compelling metaphor for life's challenges and distractions, the poem could delve deeper into this metaphor to create a more immersive experience for the reader. For example, describing the types of games or the feelings they evoke could add depth to the poem.

Finally, the poem's theme of the internal versus external could be further developed. The last line, "Still seeking real games to play," suggests a yearning for something more tangible or meaningful. Expanding on this idea could provide a more satisfying conclusion to the poem.

In conclusion, while the poem effectively communicates its theme, improvements in rhythm, imagery, and thematic development could enhance its overall impact.

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has it right for a change. I agree with much of what [it] said. Nicely done, ~ Geez.

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I was trying a Limerick. I thought it was 5 lines aabba ?
Or can it be longer to add to original theme?
I edited it so lines 1,2 were 8 syllables, 3,4 6 syllables,
Line 5. 8 syllables?

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Thank you for your comments and for reading the poems of mine!

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Hello, Clentin,
A sound try on a limerick, which of all rhyme schemes, for me, is the most difficult. It seems to have a precision to it that is either there, or it's not. The meter and rhythm, along with a funny, quirky theme are the most challenging points. (For me, at least) The rhyme pattern is the aabba as you've done. The limerick I recently wrote (that you read and commented on) had several stanzas, which is not considered the true limerick form, so you are correct - it should remain one stanza. I had tons of generous help from Thomas and Ruby, and will continue to work on it. You may want to go to for instruction. It is a worthy poetry form!
Thank you!

Thank you for reading and for your useful comments. I really appreciate it very much.

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I'll be eager to read more!
Thank you!

Thanks, will try a few more!

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