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Cry A Little
Cry a little and you will see,
all those tears will set you free.
So cry those tears and let them
flow and know you'll never
be alone.
You can cry alone
or cry with me and
be with you, I'll forever be.
So take my hand and I'll
walk with you and we
will cry together just
me and you.
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-04 20:02
Cry A Little
Hello, Heather,
Tender message, and so true. This is listed as free verse, but seems to have a bit of a loose rhyme. The last line of the second stanza has the word "be" twice. It jars the rhythm a bit, and I'm not certain the ending "be" is necessary unless it is fitting in with your rhyme.
Thank you,
L
Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-02-05 06:36
I cry often
I’m frequently crying. It’s reclaiming. I wear the tears like a badge of honor. Strong enough to process the most difficult feelings.
Good for you
Tim
Geezer
Sun, 2023-02-05 12:46
You have...
just a minor glitch, I think that the line could be fixed simply.
[and with you, I'll forever be]. Nice sentiment, too bad that most people feel that crying
is a sign of weakness. Good job. ~ Geezer.
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