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Wishes, Hopes, And Dreams
Wishes are for everyone
so are hopes and dreams.
My hopes were took long ago
at least I still have dreams.
Dreams, unlike wishes
which you have to look upon a star
or count the bundle on your cake
then blow real hard.
Wishes are forever
dreams they come and go
hopes they are the rarest kind
like spring time in the snow.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Heather Perry
Sat, 2023-02-11 17:36
You're Welcome
You're Welcome
Heather Perry
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-02-12 13:34
Hi Heather
One suggestion I have is the addition of a single comma.
Wishes are for everyone
so are hopes and dreams.
My hopes were took long ago
at least I still have dreams.
Dreams, unlike wishes
which you have to look upon a star
or count the bundle on your cake
then blow real hard.
Wishes are forever
dreams they come and go
hopes they are the rarest kind
like spring time in the snow.
Heather Perry
Sun, 2023-02-12 18:45
Thank you
Thank you for your comment
Heather Perry
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