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Messed Up
How messed up am I?
How messed up is this?
That I lose the one I really love
quickly like this.
I'd rather be hit, I'd rather be punched
instead of lose the one I have loved
so much.
It might not look like it
but I know it's true
the love and feelings I have for you.
Please say you'll hit me
say you'll swear
say you'll put me down beyond
compared.
The fear of losing you is more than enough
as I sit here crying while my
arms are cut.
How foolish am I to beg for one more
when you look at me and say
I am nothing but a whore.
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Free verse
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