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A Clerihew

Dame Judi Dench
Never sat on a bench
To learn her lines
She said bed was just fine.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
My first Clerihew. I had better not get into the habit.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem adheres to the structure of a Clerihew, a whimsical, four-line biographical poem invented by Edmund Clerihew Bentley. The first line typically ends with a person's name, and the rhyme scheme follows AABB, both of which are present in this poem.

However, the rhythm could be improved. A Clerihew often has an irregular meter, which adds to its charm, but the rhythm here feels slightly off. The second line, "Never sat on a bench," has one syllable more than the first line, which disrupts the flow. Consider revising this line to maintain a more consistent rhythm.

The content of the poem is humorous and light, fitting the tone of a Clerihew. However, it could benefit from more specific or surprising details to make the humor more striking. For example, instead of "She said bed was just fine," consider a more unexpected or quirky detail about Dame Judi Dench's process of learning lines.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more engaging title. The current title, "A Clerihew," is accurate but lacks intrigue. Consider a title that hints at the poem's content or the personality of Dame Judi Dench.

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interesting form, where did you find it? good subject matter.

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I knew of these poems but I was just assuming they were a type of limerick. I was reading about the various styles of poetry and I came upon the clerihew. Thought i would knock a couple off. Very simple really if you follow the basic rules. Alex

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I miss seeing her in movies and on TV. Quite the character actress. I also was surprised at the form that I didn't know was a thing. ~ LoL ~ Geez.
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The daughter of my wife's closest friend was a dresser for Judi Dench and said she was one of the nicest she had worked for. She also had high praise tor Tom Hanks. The worst, the rudest to almost all crew was, in her experience, De Niro. Back to the Clerihew, once again AI missed the point. I don't know why I bother. Alex.

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the AI seems too quick to call you out for the very attributes that is called for. I still say, nice job! ~ Geez.
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