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Child

I saw
He thought

But after all, we were just a little to late.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem titled "Child." Based on the brevity of the poem, it seems to capture a moment of reflection or realization. However, there are a few areas where you could further develop your poem to enhance its impact and clarity.

First, the poem's structure consists of only three lines, which can limit the depth of your message. Consider expanding on your thoughts and emotions by adding more lines or stanzas. This will allow you to provide additional context and create a stronger connection with the reader.

Next, the phrase "He thought" appears abruptly in the second line, without any preceding information. It would be helpful to provide more context or description to help the reader understand who "He" refers to and what he is thinking about. This will add depth and clarity to your poem.

Lastly, the concluding line, "But after all, we were just a little too late," leaves the reader with a sense of uncertainty. It would be beneficial to provide more details

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however, I think that this is meant to be:
"I saw
He thought
But after all, we were just a little too late."

Geezer.
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