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Blue Tomorrow

Submitted by Indivisible_Origin on Wed, 2023-02-15 09:46

I like long hair girls
and the short ones too
I like living with lust
limp it along
with blood if I must
I like kicking myself
and making it count
when i'm down
I like borrowing worry
from the man I'll be
and the sky we see
might not be
blue tomorrow
I like keeping my mind
in the corner
with my way
leaving them lost
wherever I stay
I like humming along
to dead lovers
favorite songs
I like moderation most
when it's a myth
I'll take a sip
just nip
give in to gulps
til I seem fit
to bite the building in half

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-02-15 09:57

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the tension rising until the last line! That's how I feel, I want to bite buildings in half! I want the things I say, to be part of the biggest mouthful ever. Nice stuff. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Thu, 2023-02-16 13:07

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I know what you mean.

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