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BEWARE THE PLATFORM OF BIGOTS.
I do not speak so why should they
Spout lies and filth from day to day.
Sad creatures full of bigots views
Bring misery to those they choose.
Do you heed or pay no mind?
To worthless voice, words unkind;
Spiteful barbs shot day to day
Bring misery like whips to flay
The flesh from off a victim's back
The blood to seep from weeping cracks.
Poor creatures bowed by heartless scum
Who leave their deadened bodies numb.
Self aggrandizing liars they
Must justify their lives each day;
Malicious every key they strike
To shoot dark arrows through the night.
Harken not to spiritually blind,
If you must, pay little mind
To evil creatures, empty souls,
Your misery their only goal.
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neopoet
Mon, 2024-02-19 17:40
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Beware the Platform of Bigots" presents a strong critique of individuals who spread negativity and harm through their words. The use of vivid, visceral imagery, such as "Spiteful barbs shot day to day" and "The blood to seep from weeping cracks," effectively conveys the emotional and psychological damage caused by such individuals.
However, the poem could benefit from a clearer structure and more varied rhythm. The current structure, while consistent, is somewhat monotonous and could be diversified to create a more engaging reading experience.
Additionally, the poem's message could be more nuanced. It currently presents a very black-and-white view of the world, with "bigots" causing harm and "victims" suffering. Introducing more complexity into this dynamic could make the poem more thought-provoking and relatable.
Lastly, the poem's language could be more precise. Phrases like "worthless voice, words unkind" and "evil creatures, empty souls" are somewhat vague and could be replaced with more specific descriptions or examples. This would make the poem's critique more concrete and powerful.
Overall, the poem's strong imagery and clear message are its main strengths. By improving its structure, nuance, and language precision, it could become even more impactful.
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MermaidMaster
Mon, 2024-02-19 15:57
alex-
alex-
This poem has such a musical quality and I appreciate the way you’re able to make verse sound so song like. I’ve been a fan of all the poetry I’ve read from you so far, this one included!
Thanks for sharing!
-MM
<3
Alex Tanner
Tue, 2024-02-20 18:00
Hello
Hello Mermaid. Thanks for your comments. I try to write poetry in the manner to which I most enjoy reading it. Not always but most of the time so your remarks are most welcome. Alex
Candlewitch
Tue, 2024-02-20 08:37
Deear Alex,
I grew up with these people who were "Good Christians!" and ridiculed and cut to ribbons with their terrible gossips right on the church steps. in my home, I was the scape goat for their crap. It got worse year after year after my Dad left. I do not know how these people can be so full of hate and spite, and be able to live with themselves! They must be so unhappy inside. this is a great poem flushing them out. These are my favorite lines of this poem:
The flesh from off a victim's back
The blood to seep from weeping cracks.
Poor creatures bowed by heartless scum
Who leave their deadened bodies numb.
Self aggrandizing liars they
Must justify their lives each day;
Malicious every key they strike
To shoot dark arrows through the night.
*hugs, Cat
*
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Alex Tanner
Tue, 2024-02-20 18:09
Hello Cat
Hello Cat. Maybe I have been lucky in that I have never encountered these people directly, though I knew a few of them.
Maybe it's because I have never concerned myself too much with what people think. Tonight on the news here there was a piece about premier league footballers being abused on various media outlets and I think: ''Why the hell are you on there, Do people really give a toss about what you had for breakfast, or your boring political views?''' A few selected facebook groups for me, that's enough. Alex
hippiemoon
Tue, 2024-02-20 18:24
Dear Alex
I enjoyed this poem!! The rhymes were very creative, and I believe it is an important topic to talk about- the bigotry in our world. Thank you for sharing!
Best,
hippiemoon
the moon and the stars made us who we are <3
William Lynn
Wed, 2024-02-21 22:19
Hello Alex.
Hello Alex.
While it has been many years since I have been across the pond, I'm guessing things in your world are much the same as in mine. People that actually think we give a damn about their B.S. and especially those that make up their own facts to justify their narrow selves. I rant, sorry.
Thanks for an enjoyable poem. - Will
Alex Tanner
Thu, 2024-02-22 04:43
none needed
No apologies needed Will. I find that as I age (like a good wine) one of life's pleasures is not to take crap from anyone or take notice of most people. I would shut down all media outfits, except facebook, on which I belong to several groups that are local to my interests. I had better not get started. Alex